Script Review: [NicoNico] Fate/Zero – 14

I haven’t seen the first season, but luckily, the mistakes I point out don’t require any prior knowledge of FSN.

Stuff is happening.

r/a/ge level: 10/100. Honorifics are present. NicoNico uses Western name order. No translations for the opening and ending. No one cares about NicoNico.

“If this was anything like a monster movie, we’d be goners.”

The fuck? “All of our efforts are barely enough to keep it from coming ashore.”

Observer > eyewitness.

“This is getting out of hand” or “This is now beyond our control.”

No > not. Somewhat debatable.

“Yet even their combined strength isn’t enough to kill that disgusting thing?”

Further > more.

No comma after pest.

“Learn your place, mongrel!”

If any of the rip groups have mongrel capitalized, they better hire some new editors. I mean, would you capitalize “bitch” or “fucker”? (The answer is no.)

Heaven should be capitalized, or it could be changed to divine providence or something.


What I liked:

It’s not Shakespeare, but it’s understandable. The exchange with Rin’s dad and Disgustingface was okay, but everything could use some sprucing up – sprucing up that I’m not willing to waste any more time on.

What I didn’t like:

Lackluster phrasing choices and some errors by NicoNico.

Overall Grade: 3 Noble Phantasms… out of 5.

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